Saturday, January 18, 2014

My 2nd Novel: Hidden Secrets; Chapter 10

Hidden Secrets
Chapter 10



I LOVE flowers. You may see tons of flower photos as I post. My son thinks I'm silly posting photos that have nothing to do with my novel. I call it fun. These hollyhocks came from seeds from other hollyhocks that came from other seeds all the way back to my grandmother's backyard hollyhocks. That's quite the heritage! I never look at my pink hollyhocks and don't remember my sweet grandmother.


Hidden Secrets
Leona Palmer Haag 

Chapter 10



Matthew Jensen watched waves of heat shimmer on the pavement. Hot was an understatement that afternoon. He turned his gaze away from the street beyond the window in front of him and buried his head in the local newspaper again. Panama was quickly turning into the most boring experience he'd ever had. Not a single rat was crawling out of the woodwork. Not that he'd come expecting much, but he had hoped for something.

City news, country news and world news began to blur together before his eyes into one big printed puddle. Once he'd arrived he'd hoped to get an assignment and an opportunity to show he still had valuable capabilities, but had come on such short notice that he'd intentionally been kept out of the loop. Whether that had been Mitchell's doings or the local agent's, he didn't know. Monica had her job to do and he'd been reduced to a sidekick wearing house slippers instead of a major player in steel-toed boots concealing a blade. It was a huge let down.

That evening, after an uneventful day, Matt stretched out on the firm hotel bed and watched his wife remove her earrings and then let her hair fall down from a tight French twist in tight waves of blond curls. She shook her head and the kinks slightly relaxed. She flicked a brush through it and frowned.

"Have a good day today?" Matt asked.

She frowned. "If inspecting sweat shops is your idea of a good day." She turned from the mirror and faced him. "I didn't find anything out of place. Not one thread. I saw a thousand sewing machines and a million yard of fabric but nothing else." She waved her arms in the air. “Nothing!”

Matt watched his wife turned back to the mirror and scowled. "Matt, I've got two more factories to check out and if they turn up as clean, this whole trip has been a wild goose chase. Do you know how much I hate that?" She spun back to face him again.

He shrugged. "No. Tell me about it." He wasn't really asking, because that was how he felt as well. Nothing productive had happened since he'd stepped onboard a jet in Dallas.

Monica sat on the chair next to the mirror for a moment before she jumped up and began pacing. As her steps grew faster and choppier, her anger spilled out. "I think we were sent here as a diversion. I think this whole thing is a mask for something else. Something bigger. To keep us away from finding it. Something big, mean and ugly. Someone decided to blow a little smoke so the office would send agents to the wrong fire. With Nick in Dallas playing daddy, that makes three agents out of the loop." She turned and glared at him.

Matt shrugged. "Maybe so, but where's the fire? Where should we be looking?"

Monica stopped pacing for a brief moment, then began wearing out the carpet again. "With Natalie in Maryland for a few days doing a little non-essential duty to make everyone happy, that makes four agents with their backs turned." She stopped and spun back to face him. "Where is the real spark, Matt? Where is the kindling? And the waiting gas can?"

Matt slowly sat up. He reached for a match and lit a candle and then turned off the lamp beside the bed. "Come here, beautiful and let's find out."

Monica let out a long, frustrated sigh. "Exactly. We're way off course in the office. Let's try to stay on course with each other when we can. We'll tackle work problems in the morning."

Morning found Monica dressing up for yet another tour of a clothing manufacturing company. Acting as powerful and picky Drusella Russell, she was responsible for finding a suitable new factory for producing expensive clothing at a cheap price using low-paid labor. In reality, as Monica Oscarson-Jensen, she was searching for a legitimate business acting as a front for exporting weapons or drugs. Or both. With Chi-Chi, a little fluffy fur ball dog in her arms that could sniff out explosives and gun powder, she had spent days touring one factory after another hoping to find the one an unidentified informant had reported.

In contrast, Matt donned a pair of shorts and a white t-shirt and stuffed his fake ID in his wallet before locking his true identity in the hotel room safe. As Drusella Russell's personal manager and boyfriend, Hank Bennion, he stepped out of the room and locked the door. He had approximately four hours before Monica would return and report her findings. He had little hope she'd be successful—something his wife always expected and rarely failed to accomplish.

Matt had spent the early morning on the internet searching for leads to help her. Nothing. He then turned his attention to trying to run down a useful chore for himself to do as an agent in Panama. No luck. He next hunted for a weak link in some dirty deal that he could expose. Zippo. Nada. Too bad. He’d turned up nothing.

Discouraged, Matt turned to petty crime. It was better than reading the local newspaper and wishing he wasn't on vacation. He left the hotel and wandered as if aimlessly to the tourist district where overly colorful trinkets were on display as if they were all handmade by local artisans and worth every balboa. He browsed through a few open shops and even asked questions about the cost and origin—all in English. He bought a gaudy, cheap necklace and matching bracelet in purple, orange and green for his sweetheart, knowing it was something Monica would never be caught dead wearing. He had a good laugh over it. Maybe he could talk her into wearing it to dinner. Was he persuasive enough for that? Probably not, but it would be a fun experience. He laughed again.

With a bottle of soda he paused to lean against a wall and watch the tourists and observe the crime. It only took a few seconds to spot the first incident. A beautiful senorita appeared in the crowd. She was dressed like the other tourists, but something made her stand out. Just a little edge of difference in her actions and appearance caught his attention.

Matt checked his watch. He gave her exactly thirty seconds—a generous amount of time in his estimation—to select her victim. Ten seconds later he was sure he'd nailed it on the head. A pretty blond woman admiring a scarf.

Matt checked his watch again. He gave the golden-haired local senorita sixty seconds—a generous amount of time in his estimation—to accomplish her crime. Twenty nine seconds later the senorita was within striking distance. Eight seconds later she was moving away having successfully, and unknowingly to her victim, achieved her goal.

Matt allowed himself thirteen seconds to intercept the senorita and another ten to retrieve the stolen wallet through a gentle bump of his own. He didn't time himself, but assumed it only took twenty-three seconds. For fun he tossed in one Spanish word whispered in the pretty senorita's ear, "Prison."

Returning the wallet was a littler messier. "Ma'am! Ma'am!" he called until the blond woman finally turned her attention to him. "I—I think you dropped this back there where you bought your scarf," he said as if panting.

The woman looked shocked, and her husband, who now thought he ought to join her and maybe defend or protect her, looked relieved.

"Maybe you should use the zipper in that suitcase-like bag. Maybe don't pull the wallet out again. Maybe…" Matt shrugged as if unsure how to prevent it from happening again. He wanted to say, "Maybe watch for theft. Maybe pay attention. This isn't middle America."

Matt received his thanks and left while the couple opened the wallet to inspect the contents. He suspected he'd really only stopped one crime, but the senorita had probably committed ten more as she'd hastily fled the scene. Her chances of returning within a few minutes were high as well.

With his good deed done for the day, Matt left to find a place to eat lunch. He ordered something that sounded half American in a little café and reached for his wallet.

Gone!

He'd been a victim too? He no longer possessed a credit card with no real account number, a driver's license for someone that didn't exist, and a dozen photos of the wife and kids back home whom he'd never met, married or sired. Gone was the library card, fake parking validation and security parking pass. Gone were his stack of bogus business cards. He'd also lost eight well-worn American dollar bills totallying nearly a hundred dollars, and a few receipts for things he never bought, including dry cleaning for a shirts he didn't own. He was humiliated. So much for being a smart guy. Some hero he turned out to be.

Matt dug into a front pocket in his shorts and retrieved a wad of bills and paid for his lunch. He sat down at a table under a bright umbrella and pulled out his cell phone to notify the office of his bad luck. He took the first bite of his meal and just as he was ready to punch in the phone number, his phone beeped. The incoming text message read: Check in ASAP.

Matt groaned. They knew already? Someone must have tried to use the credit card. He knew he was in for a lecture. Maybe immediate recall. Suspension? His whole week had been lousy and now his day had gone from bad to worse. He decided to finish lunch before he faced the music.

End Chapter 10

You know, I'm a little bit confused, here. I really thought I had that ugly rat climb all over Natalie in a previous version of my novel. It went up a leg and sat on her head and scared the crap out of her, etc. I wonder what happened to that scene. Did I edit it right out of the book because I thought there was no way the rat wouldn't have triggered the crossbows? Probably. Obviously, I over-thought the whole thing during some rewrite. Trust me, it was really funny. Truly horrible! Now I wish I'd left it in. I guess some things improve as a manuscript is edited, but some good things are lost. Oh well. I hope you're enjoying Hidden Secrets.
 

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